1 thing i didn’t like:

I thought some of your big words were unnecessary and a little showy. Like, I could have said ‘ostentatious’ there instead of showy. But i didn’t. Cuz showy works just fine and uses less effort to write and understand.

all the things I did like:

The editing of all those little ‘mmmm’ and ‘awwwm’ noises is excellent.

Imaginative descriptions

Appropriate mix of funny and seriousness.

Nice music linking it all together. and tres professional editing stack!

Nice mix between conversational spontaneous tone and formal writing tone. Love that story about Dave the ageing jewish hippy guy.